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Friday, June 10, 2016

My Worst Day ever

W.A.L.T recall  events through the eyes of an animal.

I know I will be successful when my recount has a
  • Title
  • Orientation:  When? Who? Where? Why?
  • Sequence of events:  What happened? Describe using the senses (hear, taste, see, smell and feel).
  • Personal Comment:  How did the events make you feel?

Worst Day Ever

Me and my pride of lions are resting in the warm sun smelling at the fresh December air of the African Savannah.  When we were resting we smelled something delicious and tasty, my mouth was watering. We saw herds of buffalos coming toward us, so we froze and slowly moved towards them. The herd stopped and I told my pride of lions to charge at the baby buffalo. Slowly we got closer then BOOM! The chase was on. We chased the baby calf and I was the one who pushed the baby calf into the water. We dragged the baby out of the until the crocodile came quickly as a cheetah runs. The crocodile grabbed the baby calf's tail, then we had a war which was a challenge of who get’s the delicious, tastiest food. The crocodile was tired and it just took the baby calf's tail. We won the delicious tastiest food then we were ready to eat the baby calf then I smelt something dangerous ahead and the ground was shaking. It was the herd’s and the baby calf’s dad came to rescue his baby calf and then the herd started running at as then they started kicking us chasing us until baby calf’s dad threw me into the air we were far away from the baby calf the then the baby calf was free and back to his family. The herd dad and baby calf was gone and we had nothing to eat. I felt very sad and hungry. I thought that we could try to eat a crocodile instead of a buffalo.


Lion Vs Buffallo #1 | Lion

2 comments:

  1. Hi Ranit I really liked your story. Its fantastic. I like when you said {Boom! The chase was on.} You are missing some punctuation like at here{from the baby calf the then the baby calf } But anyway Excellent Job!!!

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  2. Thank you Samyog. I'll try my hardest.

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