Term 2 Week 3
W.A.L.T recall events through the eyes of an animal.
Success Criteria
I know I will be successful when my recount has a
- Title
- Orientation: When? Who? Where? Why?
- Sequence of events: What happened? Describe using the senses (hear, taste, see, smell and feel).
- Personal Comment: How did the events make you feel?
First Draft.
The Worst Day ever
(Lion)
Me and my pride of lions are resting in the warm sun smelling at the fresh air . When we were resting we smelled something delicious and tasty, my mouth was watering. We saw herds of buffalos coming toward us , so we stay frezed and slowly moved towards them. The herd stopped and I told my pride of lions to charge at the baby buffalo. Slowly we got closer we then Boom, the chase was on.
It is a another beautiful day at African Savannah. In December my dad is a leadbull of all herds and we are going rest in the sun. When we were resting in the sunset. We were so tired that we needed a break . When we were going to have a drink then the pride of lions showed up.
Hi Ranit, I really like your written story it fantastic. But your first paragraph is all about lion and the second one is all about Buffalo.But anyway Great job!
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